Narrative writing

In writing we had to make a narrative writing and i make one about Goldilocks and here it is.

Scrap Scrap as the reader read  this book amh once upon a time there lived the three bears.First came out father bear second came mother bear
And last but not least baby bear.Mother bear was cooking fresh juicy porridge And while she was cooking. Father bear and baby bear were sitting down next to the table.”The porridge is done,”   said mother bear finally rubilled father bear . Baby bear helped mother make the table and they started to take a sip… HOT HOT HOT stooted father.We should take a walk while it is cooling down said mother bear “ok” said baby bear and they went.

                                       
Ooo  Let me go on the next character  Goldilocks she is nice,friendly ,smart ,happy sweet, not careful,and awesome and what she looks  like is that she has freckles , short , happy . She smashed into the three bears house “because she was hungry “ she looked on the table
And saw three bowls of porridge one was big and one was small also one medium  first she tried the big bowl it was still hot.” HOT” she screamed and went over to the other bowl “Ew” she said two soft and went to the other bowl yum this is just right and gobiled it all up crack went the chair
Wopsie what do i do, maybe I'll just say i  accidentally  broke your chair and off she went to the bedroom yawn i need to go to sleep and she got on the biggest bed “ow “ this bed is too hard and off she went to the second
bed “tow soft she said and went to the other bed “Wow” this bed is just right
And she slept.Crack the door opened and came in the three bears and they went to the table and Father bear shouted SOMEBODY HAS BEEN EATING MY PORRIDGE
 Mother bear in her sweet voice said some body has been eating my porridge and baby bear said in his baby voice somebody has been  eating my porridge.
                               
               
  they went to the bedroom Father bear shouted “SOMEBODY HAS BEEN SLEEPING IN MY BED “and mother bear said in her sweet voice “somebody has been sleeping in my bed” and then baby bear said in a baby voice “somebody has been sleeping in my bed”and she is in it right
now.Father bear and mother bear rowed so loudly all the fairy tales heard them. Goldilocks woke up in a fright “Where am i” and she saw the three bear right in front of  her and she ran as quick as possible and ran out of the village ThE END.